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考前30天狂背作文 第三章 范文点评(30)
 
08-05-04 17:19:13 来源: 作者:

Directions 2

Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:

1. describe the picture, and

2. point out the reasons why more and more foreigners like to live in China.

You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

 

 

审题:

 

《西湖晨景》该题目非常简洁,在提纲中已给出文章的主题,即越来越多的外国人喜爱在中国生活--在描述图画后,给出原因即可。

Sample:

    What an attractive scene it is! On such a peaceful and beautiful morning by West Lake, a middle aged foreigner is jogging-he is enjoying the fresh air, cool breeze and charming scenery. From this picture, we can see clearly that the foreigner enjoys life in this Chinese city, Hangzhou.

     As a matter of fact, in the past few years, more and more foreigners have chosen to live in China. Some work here, some pursue their study in universities and even some join volunteer activities in China. The reasons why more and more foreigners like to live in China can be listed as follows. To begin with, since China's reform and opening up in 1978, our country has witnessed great progress in nearly all aspects of the society, especially in economy, which provides a far better environment of working, investing and studying for foreigners. Second, economic globalization has made cultural blending possible and necessary. Foreigners have come to know more and more about Chinese culture and become influenced by it, which has formed the important basis of their living in China. Last but not the least, it is obvious that with every effort we have made in environmental protection, our country has become a place more and more suitable and pleasant to live in.

    In my opinion, the arrival of foreigners brings more chances and opportunities of economic development. So why not seize such chances to embrace our bright future?

点评:

第一段描述图画。这一段写得非常精彩,先以感叹句开头,而后描述图画,最后小结--这位外国人喜爱在杭州的生活。

第二段前两句总结了外国人来我国的现象。第三句是原因类的模板句,而后分三点来说:第一点是说改革开放后我国经济发展迅速,给外国人提供了很好的工作、投资和学习环境;第二点是说经济全球化促进文化融合--外国人对中国文化了解更多,这构成了他们在中国生活的重要基础;第三点是说环境保护效果显著,居住条件自然改善了。

最后一段说外国人的到来带到了更多的经济发展的机会,所以为什么不抓住这些机会来拥抱我们美好的明天呢?

心得:

要写出好文章,首先要对文章的基本结构非常熟悉,而后再做出一些变化,这些变化通常就是亮点。比如第一段先使用了一个感叹句,立即吸引了读者的注意力。第三段第二句使用了反问句,效果非常强烈。

 

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