作文冲刺点拨:决胜关键在于创造闪光点

games, or delivering email.
　　for a start替换to begin with
　　we can, freely, search用了插入语的写作手法
　　our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened.用了非常精彩的被动
　　additionally替换in addition / besides
　　deliver替换send
　　there is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,***, porn pictures, av-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
　　there is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings,这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先there is no denying that这个句型，还有however作为插入语，function in the disservice of替换do harm to
　　emerging代替appearing ( fading代替disappearing )
　　net citizen网民，属于精彩用词
　　as a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. computers do play a positive role in the development of people’ lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. we should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.

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